Blue Fairy

this story is amazing. I love it. It was really hard to find anything to critique. the setting and descriptions were great. the only thing I could think of is: ...

for some reason I really want to buy it ( if I had that much money) are they really trying to sell this? scottish people are great :D

I think you wondered away from what you were talking about at the start which is ok but the start was really good. it didn't make sense by the end ...

hi matt that just happened to me. it wouldn't let me write anything a minute ago. i can't think what to do but at least your not the only one ...

hi welcome to YWS. :D Is the first part of the first chapter or is this the whole of it? any way which ever one it is I thought it ...

awww thats so sweet. I loved it. You must be lucky. :D Fairy

I loved it. the interaction between the doctor and rose was great. I never thought how jealous martha would be if rose came back it was really good. I couldn't ...

This is a good start. I love the descriptions and the graveyard gave it more effect. I couldn't find much to critique. His skin was burnt charcoal black. There were ...

you have a really good idea here but the punctuation made some parts quite hard to read. Oriana Nyx stirred in her sleep the curtain of black hair, which framed ...

This story was so great. it really scared me. *shivers I could only find a few small things to critique. Where adults allowed being scared in movies? I didn't understand ...

this scene is really good. i couldn't find many big things to critique just small suggestions. Father and daughter took their rightful place at the top of the table I ...

this is really good. i loved the way you strung the thoughts of the person together with desciptions of his surroundings. you also described others people well so that anyone ...

firstly i think this story goes through things too quickly. it seems more like someone explaining something to someone else when they don't have much time if you know what ...

i have now edited and improved my story with the critque. thank you. please keep reviewing it :) Fairy

In the chatroom last night when you made that comment about someone elses writing being really bad people thought that was unfair. I agree but i don't think you should ...